DAVIS, brooke alyssa

[brooke]

-- BROOKE ALYSSA DAVIS !

-- NAME: brooke alyssa davis
-- NICKNAMES: B,
-- AGE & BIRTHDAY: twenty//20th September
-- BIRTH PLACE: capeside
-- ORIENTATION: hetrosexual
-- OCCUPATION & SCHOOL GRADE: college sophmore
-- PLAYED BY: nina dobrev

-- PERSONALITY !

-- STUBBORN:
Brooke is stubborn, she doesn’t like to back down easily, if there is something she wants then she will do her best to get it because she is that kind of person, she is very dedicated with everything she does though, that is generally why she is stubborn, she refuses to give up easily on everything she does. She likes to make sure she gets the most out of everything, she is detirmind, which is often mistaken for stubbornness because she won’t give up, she likes to just keep going until she gets what she wants, or does what she wanted to do. She tries hard in everything she does.

-- FRIENDLY: Despite her stubbornness, she is a good friend...very loyal, she won’t tell anyone a secret you have told her and will take it with her to her grave. She will get along with most people, as long as you don’t give her a reason to be a bit of a bitch then she’ll be a friend till the end, she loves just having a laugh, she isn’t typically girlie but she is a typical girl, she loves a good gossip with her friends, Brooke sometimes has issues with people who run their mouth at herself or the people she cares about, but she tries to keep it on the down low because it just causes problems.

—not thatNAIVE: She sometimes misjudges situations, and she gets herself into bad situations, she is quite trusting of most people, she just likes to give everyone a chance because she thinks life is too short, she doesn’t see any point in being warey of people, but maybe that is a little bit of stupidity on her part, and bad judgement. Guys often think that she is up for more than she is, and sometimes she leads them on, not realising. She is by no means innocent though, she has had a few somewhat relationships but she doesn’t like them getting too serious, she likes to keep it casual.

-- LOVES: friends, her mother, siblings, animals, kisses, cuddles, cupcakes, cookies, college, movie nights, drinking, going out, parties, having fun, sex, guys,
-- HATES: sleazy guys, not getting what she wants, money, rain, bitches, her stubbornness, people only liking her because of her looks, fake people, raw tomatoes, being too cold, early mornings, the sound of the alarm clock in the morning, her father, drugs.

-- HISTORY !

Being the youngest of three, Brooke was born on 20th September, 1990 to Allison and Harry davis. Weighing 8lb, brooke was a healthy baby. Mother and baby were able to go home a couple of days later and she soon settled in the family home. Her childhood was a good time for her, she had friends and family around her all the time and she was happy and content, she was loved by her family and got things that she needed/wanted but she wasn’t spoilt. Her family was middle class but they weren’t loaded with money, her mother being a teacher in high school and her father an accountant, by the age of twelve, her older brother went away to college and she really missed him. She was really close with both her siblings, and was just glad that she still had her sister around her because she didn’t want to be the only one around the house with her parents.

Her teen years were not that great, her father lost his job and as a result they suffered money problems, as a result of it, her parents got divorced. She took her parents break up the hardest and she started to get a little rebellious, nothing really bad, just skipping school to hang with friends instead and she became a little promiscuous. When her parents’ divorce was final, she went to live with her sister, seeing as she was eighteen, and Brooke was fifteen. She thought it was the best thing ever, but she didn’t really see her parents much. Just recently she has regained her relationship with her mother, but her father didn’t want anything to do with either of his children and had turned to drink. Brooke tried to give him help but he refused, so now she regards it that she does not have a father anymore.

-- SAMPLE !

Maybe a little, I’ll give you that much she grinned at him. You’re a really bad liar she agreed But that isn’t a bad thing, at all. she said. You know I hate liars she smiled.
aren’t vampires suppose to be suave anyway? she questioned.
Well most of them anyway...I think that’s the look that TV and movies certainly give them. she said. I am not too convinced with all the obsessions with vampires right now, I mean the Vampire Diaries is okay...but like, why do we need that AND twilight? she said, it was more of a rhetorical question, she wasn’t really expecting him to reply with an answer. You think you pull it off? Really? she asked joking with him. Pete wentz has the whole weird look going on anyway, I don’t think you suit that look but that is just my opinion.Yeah, I’d save it just for me she smiled. It would be funny though, I bet you’d get some looks from some people she said. That’s always funny. Some people are so judgemental though. It’s not fair is it? she said softly. She knew that Lorcan had been one of those people who got judged in high school, for not being as social as everyone else. Brooke had even got a few bitchy remarks from people herself for hanging out with him, but she didn’t care what anyone else thought about her. Though she cared about her friends and it pissed her off when they had spoken badly about him because they didn’t know him. Of course her best friends she was still in touch with now hadn’t done that though.

Sexy, hot she shrugged putting a hand out palm up with each word. They are basically the same aren’t they? she smiled. Well I am glad you think so she smiled. At least it was worth dressing like this she smiled. Awww you’d let me cuddle up to you? Cute she grinned. If you get scared you can do the same she smiled going along with it. I do happen to love horror movies though, being scared is the best part right? she said. Ouch, painful...I think that would do the trick though, you’d be my hero she grinned. Thanks so much! she said. Well I have done some of it, but not much, it’s not been a case of not being able to...more being too busy. There are some people who think that they are the only ones in my life and seem to want to control what I do she said. Well they did she muttered. And that is why I just haven’t done much. If my parents found out, they would kill me. I mean it’s like writing a script, or the beginning so it has to be like ten pages, I just need some inspiration. You’re stories from work usually inspire me, like what you tell me about some of the people, and how they eventually change their lives around. Maybe I’ll do something like that. she shrugged.

She laughed slightly and slapped him on the arm gently. Hayy! she laughed. Thanks she smiled at him for saying she would find the right moment. It made her feel better. Sounds like you are speaking from experience. she said to him. She was rather open with her love life to her other friends, though she did make one lie, which she hated because she hated liars...that she wasn’t a virgin, though it wasn’t so much a lie, more like she went along with her friends thinking she wasn’t one. They just assumed. She went to get the vodka and poured herself another glass, then sat back down next to him. She hugged him back and smiled. You’re just saying that because your my best friend she said to him about her looking good anyway even though she knew she looked the equililant to a drowned rat with her smudged make up. But thanks anyway she said. That sounds good. We could even go out she smiled. I mean once we’ve watched a few movies. she said. All she wanted was to get drunk and forget about him, which Lorcan seemed up for doing which she was really glad about. That is true she said. It’s a shame. There should be more guys like you around. she said to him. She knew Lorcan wasn’t the way he was with her with everyone, but that made her feel special, and that was what every girl wanted, right? You make me feel special, so you’ll make one girl really happy one day. she smiled but then sighed. She really wished that she could find a guy like him, who would make her feel special. Well they love me for my looks more, they only seem to want one thing, most of them anyway. she couldn’t see herself getting into another relationship anytime soon, not unless they were someone really special.

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-- OOC !

-- NAME OR ALIAS: brooke
-- AGE: 23
-- THREE WORDS THAT DESCRIBE YOU: friendly, fun, easy going
-- HOW YOU FOUND US: on another rp website advertise section.

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[* NIKKI THE PEACOCK QUEEN]

-- PENDING !

- Your thread title needs to just be 'brooke alyssa davis.' Without the quotes, obviously.
- There is a lot of redundancy throughout your application. You end a lot of sentences with the same words, you start a lot of sentences with the same words, you use "she said" as a staple through your sample. It makes everything really choppy and kind of hard to read. It loses it's flow when the same words pop up every couple of words and at the beginning and end of every sentence. If you could re-read through things and take note of that, and maybe fix some of it, that would be a good idea.
- I'd really like to see a different sample. Maybe one with less conversation, so it's less choppy and we can understand her for her and not just her reactions. It doesn't have to be the same character you're applying for, obviously.
- Watch your punctuation, some of your sentences run on forever. Your second trait is made up of two, really long, run on sentences. When it really should be about four or five.

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